Carpe Diem Tan Renga Weekend Challenge #1 – Raindrops

As part of the weekend challenge, had to write a  Squared Tan Renga. A Tan Renga is a Japanese form of poetry in which 2 stanzas are written. The first in 5-7-5 syllables and the second of 2 lines of 7 syllables each. The interesting thing about this poetry is that both stanzas are written by 2 different poets. We were given a stanza by Kobayashi Issa, one of the five greatest Haiku poets to which we had to add our own two-line stanza and the second one by Chèvrefeuille, the host of this challenge.

raindrops
raindrops

The first stanza by © Issa, the second in blue by me

three raindrops
a greeting card from heaven…
midsummer heat

tilted head, my lips apart,

one drop, grace my parched throat…Drop!

The second Haiku, part of the squared Tan Renga challenge by © Chèvrefeuille and the one in blue by me

rainbow-round.jpg
picture by Louis Armstrong – scribbledartsfromtheheart.com

flying away
following the rainbow
into heaven

a treasure awaits beyond,

High, high, I fly, far from here…

Hopefully you enjoyed reading it as much as I did. Joining my stanza with another poet’s was an interesting experience.

Carpe Diem Haiku Kai is the place to be if you like to write and share haiku, tanka or other Japanese poetry forms such as choka and kikobun. It’s a warmhearted family of haiku poets created by Chèvrefeuille, a Dutch haiku poet. Japanese poetry is the poetry of nature and it gives an impression of a moment as short as the sound of a pebble thrown into water.

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20 responses to “Carpe Diem Tan Renga Weekend Challenge #1 – Raindrops”

  1. milan rajkumar Avatar

    And now we see the difference in our points of view !
    How sublime , the thirsty mouth and the ever quenching Drop ! Wonderful !

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  2. Andrea Stephenson Avatar

    An interesting, if slightly intimidating challenge, but I loved your additions Smitha.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      😊you said it. The Tan Renga was intimidating and had to read it and re-read it to understand what was expected of me. I am really glad you liked the end result. Thank you so much.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thanks Bhavana. Missed your comments. Trust you’re fine.

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      1. Bhavana Avatar

        Yes Smitha..I’m fine , Thanks for your concern. I was going through your blogs & whenever I clicked like button it went to blank page.🤔 so checking it out again

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  3. boundlessblessingsblog Avatar

    Awesome words of a flying rainbow. Too good, Smitha.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much for you lovely words. I am happy you liked the poem😊

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      1. boundlessblessingsblog Avatar

        Welcome Smitha and yes for sure.

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  4. Sangbad Avatar

    Wonderfully beutifull…

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  5. Chèvrefeuille Avatar

    You did great. It’s really a joy to create Tan Renga together with another poet. It’s a nice way of improving associative writing. Thank you for participating.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much😊for your encouraging words. I am enjoying the learning, thanks to Carpe-Diem.

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      1. Chèvrefeuille Avatar

        I am happy to hear that

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  6. Kurian Avatar

    It’s not a surprise, now I know Smitha the quality of your writing.
    To get the rain drops on to throat through slightly parted lips.!!
    There’s no limit to imagination when it comes in the hands of perfect talent

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much Kurian. Your words are very, very encouraging. I am learning each day and am truly humbled by your kind words.

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      1. Kurian Avatar

        Again so sweet a response. I am sure you will do well and I will gain in following you.
        Cheers to the friendship

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        1. Smitha V Avatar

          Cheers😊 Good to know you in the virtual world and I truly hope I remaining deserving of the confidence shown in me. Thank you.

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          1. Kurian Avatar

            You are welcome
            Thank You for the company in the virtual world

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