Carpe Diem #1329 – Rebirth…I see Thee in the Flowers.

For today’s quote, I wrote a Tanka  Sequence or Tanka String as it is called (a group of Tankas related to each other. A Tanka for those who are not aware is Japanese poetry written in sentences following the 5-7-5-7-7 syllables pattern.

Today’s quote is:

[…] “The ashes of the dead … will become the plants that are reborn in the spring.” […] (Source: The Fifth Mountain by Paulo Coelho)

The story is based on the account of Elijah from the Hebrew Bible (1 Kings chapters 17-19). The focus is on Elijah’s time in Zarephath (in this book named Akbar). Much has been added to the simple Bible story by Coelho, including Elijah witnessing the sacking of Akbar by the Assyrians, Elijah’s journey up the Fifth Mountain itself (said to be the dwelling place of Baal), and Elijah’s falling in love with the widow to whom God sent him.
For a considerable portion of the story Elijah is very compliant, obeying everything God’s angels say. Eventually he realizes that his destiny is not being chosen by him but by God and ultimately he decides to abide by his own desires and will.

© Chèvrefeuille

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The below Tanka Sequence is dedicated to my mother who passed away on Jan 1st 2006.

I

‘Twas New Year’s day…
When Thee hath returned to dust,
We held ‘t closely,
All that now hath left of Thee,
Thou dust and thou memories…

II

A gust of wind blew,
Took some of Thou dust with it,
Unrestrained, ‘t moved,
Dropping some along the way,
Some here, some there ; Sprinkle!

III

Where Thou dust did fall,
I know without any doubt-
That’s where the flowers,
Grow; the yellow cheery ones,
Stand tall, swaying in the wind…

IV

For Thee lov’d yellow…
At times… I get confused though,
By the red roses,
Their soft petals fluttering,
For I know Thou loved those too.

V

I know Thee art here,
‘Coz I see Thee in the flowers…
I hear thy sweet voice,
In the chirping of the birds…
And I feel Thee in the breeze.

 

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Note: While I did add a touch of Shakespeare, I couldn’t change the words completely because of the limitations of the syllable counter. I might try writing this again some day in pure Shakespearean English. 

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17 responses to “Carpe Diem #1329 – Rebirth…I see Thee in the Flowers.”

  1. thewritewomanblog Avatar

    Beautiful Tanka, Smitha.

    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Looks like my lucky day..so many comments from you😊. It’s been a long time. Thank you Pranitha.

      1. thewritewomanblog Avatar

        Haha! Yes, my lucky day too. Got to read a lot of interesting posts after a big break from WordPress.

        1. Smitha V Avatar

          😀.Trust you had a good break. Sometimes it’s great to take a breather and looking forward to reading your posts after the break.

          1. thewritewomanblog Avatar

            Thank you, Smitha. Will look forward to reading your feedback too!

          2. Smitha V Avatar

            Absolutely😊

  2. Mukhamani Avatar

    Our memories keep our near and dear ones alive. Thank you for sharing.

    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Yes…so true. Am glad you stumbled upon my blog and I got to read your post.

  3. Andrea Stephenson Avatar

    Beautiful Smitha, a heartfelt tribute to your mother, while encompassing the cycle of life.

    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much Andrea💓. I hope you had a wonderful Christmas!

  4. Chèvrefeuille Avatar

    Wonderful idea to create a tanka string … and this string is awesome.

    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you Chevrefeuille. I’m loving every quote you choose as part of the challenge. Don’t know if I would have ever written Japanese poetry if not for your site. Thank you.

  5. boundlessblessingsblog Avatar

    Beautiful Tanka and so well composed lines. Simply marvelous, Smitha. Thanks for the share.

    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much Kamal. Am so glad you found it so. I enjoyed writing it as much…you know when they say ‘the words just flowed’…xxx

      1. boundlessblessingsblog Avatar

        Yes absolutely true, Smitha and the words surely flows. Welcome dear.

        1. Smitha V Avatar

          ❤ thank you☺

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