NaPoWriMo Day 2 : Kidnapped

Today’s prompt (optional, as always) is based on this poem by Claire Wahmanholm, which transforms the natural world into an unsettled dream-place. One way it does this is by asking questions – literally. The poem not only contains questions, but ends on a question. Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a poem that similarly resists closure by ending on a question, inviting the reader to continue the process of reading (and, in some ways, writing) the poem even after the poem ends.

dream or real

It’s happening

I see it with open eyes

or are they closed?

Crowded streets, busy markets

Me jostling… making my way

Foreign faces – man in a stained blue shirt

Or is it a green shirt with blue stains?

He’s watching

Or is he ogling-

Us…me and her?

I ask him to move, I ask her to follow

“Is this enough?” he sneers, stepping aside

I walk past; don’t look up

Then turn around

She’s gone

I see him smile

Or is he snickering?

Was it him?

Where is she?

My palms are wet; what should I do?

I can’t think; my eyes search wildly

I’m lost, I can’t see

My glasses, I’ve forgotten them

There are people; hundreds

Moving here and there, everywhere

And me… him

But, not her

My breathing fast , my pulse racing

Is that my heart-beat?

I hear it loud, louder

I break out in a sweat

It’s dark around

Pitch black

I’m awake

Or did I just wake?

 

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25 responses to “NaPoWriMo Day 2 : Kidnapped”

  1. Andrea Stephenson Avatar

    There’s a great balance in your poem between questions and statements that give it an unsettling air all the way through to the potentially sinister ending…

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much Andrea. Your comment is very motivating. And as always, I wait for it 🙂

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  2. Both of us can't look good...it's either me or the house Avatar

    I wanted to kick his ankles when he sneered at you and gave you little room to pass. I saw the picture with the frightened eyes of the girl and it seemed so darn scary. Got I got passed that to read your very good poem. Have a good day.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      I read your comment to my daughter and she was so happy. Thank you Benita for passing by my blog, reading the poem and your kind words. Motivation works in this month😊

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  3. LuAnne Holder Avatar

    How horrid to lose a child in a crowd. You painted a disturbing picture well and executed the prompt with skill.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you LuAnne. I wouldn’t ever want to experience it…ever. Or want anybody else to. Its absolutely ‘ horrid’ like you said. Thank you very much for appreciating the poem though.😊🌷

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  4. Sam Allen Creative Coach Avatar

    Full of suspense – a great write!

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much Sam. And Happy Birthday to you!

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      1. Sam Allen Creative Coach Avatar

        Ah – thank you so much! It’s a snowy one this end!

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        1. Smitha V Avatar

          Sounds fun! But snow at this time of the year-where is this- ?

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          1. Sam Allen Creative Coach Avatar

            I am from the UK but living in Switzerland. This is not the norm though!

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you Frank for reading and leaving a comment. I’m glad it achieved its goal. Thank you again😊

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  5. Madhumita (ms_reluctance) Avatar

    This gave me anxiety! Great imagery, very atmospheric. Well written!

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much Madhumita for your positive comment. Woke up to find this comment😊. It made my day🌷

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  6. Oloriel Avatar

    I am glad to read this was just a nightmare you had, the poem is very shiver inducing.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      🙂 yes it was thankfully. A frightening one that felt so real…I saw the color of his shirt too. Today’s prompt allowed me to put it into a poem. Thank you for reading and for your wonderful comment.

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  7. areadingwriter Avatar

    This felt like a prologue of a mystery thriller novel! Really good!

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you for such a motivating comment. Am glad you dropped by. It led me to your blog. Enjoyed reading your poem ‘where is my home?’ Its simple and so full of meaning.

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      1. areadingwriter Avatar

        Awww. You’re welcome! Happy to discover your blog, too via NaPoWriMo!

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  8. Susan L Daniels Avatar

    Wow. Love this. I was in tour nightmare.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Oh thank you Susan. I had this nightmare last night 🙂 So when the prompt came, thought I’d write about it and get closure.

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