NaPoWriMo 2020: Day 12 – I moved on

For today’s prompt (optional, as always), the challenge is to write a triolet. These eight-line poems involve repeating lines and a tight rhyme scheme. The repetitions and rhymes can lend themselves to humorous poems, as well as to poems expressing dramatic or sorrowful moods. And sometimes the repetitions can be used in deceptive ways, by splitting the words in a given line into different sentences, and making subtle changes, as in this powerful triolet by Sandra McPherson.

So the scheme is  ABaAabAB (The capital letter are lines repeated. The small letters follow the rhyme scheme of the respective capital letters) .

I wrote three triolets which could be read independently of each other or together as one poem. So you can read the three in any order you like and let me know how it works for you or if there’s a particular sequence you like.


I

I’m no longer the girl I used to be-

Sweet and naive and easy to please

I know what I want, I know what makes me happy

I’m no longer the girl I used to be

And you’re no longer my bad dream, my bitter memory

You’re the path I left behind, you’re the ironed out crease

I’m no longer the girl I used to be-

Sweet and naive, and easy to please

II

I loved you so much

It broke me at first

You’d become my crutch

I loved you so much

I thought there was nonesuch

But you were the worst

I loved you so much

It broke me at first

 

III

Its not as if you didn’t know

Its more like you didn’t care

If I was feeling happy or if I was feeling low

Its not as if you didn’t know

What made me leave and go

Don’t ask me what went wrong and where

Its not as if you didn’t know

Its more like you didn’t care

i moved on1

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Our poetry resource for the day is Ours Poetica, a poetry YouTube Channel, where you will find new video poems three times a week.

 

 

 

8 responses to “NaPoWriMo 2020: Day 12 – I moved on”

  1. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    This is lovely, Smitha, but very poignant.

    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you Robbie. So glad you liked it. Everyday the prompts get more challenging. It feels great to come up with a poem that meet them and are liked. So thank you 🙂

    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thanks so much Moushmi.

  2. Xan Avatar
    Xan

    Oh, “you’re the ironed out crease” is just brilliant. I love poets.

    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you Xan. So glad you liked it. It means a lot.

  3. Feelings and Freedom Avatar

    Loved the first one 🙂

    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thanks Vandana 🙂

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