I’m not making excuses

It's been ages since I told you, 'I love you'
Or showed you that I do

It's not that I'm not in love with you
I am. But, being loved by you and loving you

Feels like a habit- consistent, like breathing,
and predictable like the rising sun

Maybe, if our love
Was like the moon-

Waning and waxing
Or the tide- rising and falling

Maybe,then I'd need to 
proclaim my love for you, like lovers do.

This is not me making an excuse 
This is me saying, 'You are my muse'

If it appears like I love so much else, it's true.
But, that's only because of the love i have for you.

 
P.S - I wan't sure whether to add the last 2 stanzas or end the poem at 'like lovers do'. What do you think?

12 responses to “I’m not making excuses”

  1. Andrea Stephenson Avatar

    Hi Smitha, I think the last two stanzas make it romantic. Without them it speaks about how we don’t say I love you because love is a habit – very true – and you could draw the conclusion that there isn’t enough love left, because it’s no longer grand, but the last verse in particular grounds it again in love, by saying everything else follows on from the love you have for the person in the poem.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Hi Andrea, thank you for explaining the difference to me- between keeping the two stanzas and not. With this clear difference that you point out, you’ve cleared all doubt. I’m retaining it🙂. I especially like how you say that the last verse makes love ‘grand’. Thank you so, so much❤.

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  2. Infinite Living Avatar

    Oh but it wouldn’t be complete without those parts that did flow from you. So I love it exactly as it is now, it is all yours and that is what is important 🙂

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      😊 thank you, Pragalbha. I just thought for ‘poetry sake’ I should get rid of the two stanzas. I added the last two on a whim. Thank you for writing back and affirming it’s fine.💛

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  3. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    This is lovely, Smitha. Did you write it for your husband?

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you, Robbie. Yes,I wrote it for my husband. I added the last 2 stanzas later. They were more an addendum and not part of the original. I’m so glad you liked it.

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  4. boundlessblessingsblog Avatar

    Nice and romantic poem, Smitha. The whole poem was beautiful.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you, dear Kamal. I thought it was about time that I expressed my love🙂

      Like

      1. boundlessblessingsblog Avatar

        Yes absolutely and why not. Welcome always dear Smitha 💖

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  5. Vineetha Brijesh Avatar

    I loved this one. It’s so beautiful 🥰

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thanks Vin 🙂 XXX

      Like

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