NaPoWriMo Day 16- Save the sunflowers

“Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a curtal sonnet. This is a variation on the classic 14-line sonnet. The curtal sonnet form was developed by Gerard Manley Hopkins, and he used it for what is probably his most famous poem, “Pied Beauty.” A curtal sonnet has eleven lines, instead of the usual fourteen, and the last line is shorter than the ten that precede it. Here are two other examples of Hopkins’ curtal sonnets: “Ash Boughs,” and “Peace.”

This is my first time attempting this kind of sonnet. I found it challenging and after a lot of thought, this is what came up. It’s hard to ignore the elephant in the room, just because I’m busy with NaPoWriMo.

Death's on a rampage like an elephant in musth
He's charging towards mankind like El Toro* on the loose
Burning with fury, bloodthirsty,unleashed, unabashed 
An emotionless predator( how elastic is his girth?)
Last,it was the virus; now, he has a new ruse
'Coz His bulging appetite remains unappeased

So, the wretched spirit is on the rounds again
hungry for more; this time he's tightened the noose
around the land of sunflowers, and  grain.
He roams the streets, gulping ravenously, unrestrained.
God save,Ukraine!

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*El Toro - Bull in Spanish

I managed to write a second curtal sonnet after I wrote this one- 
this time more spiritual. If you'd like to read it, click here.

18 responses to “NaPoWriMo Day 16- Save the sunflowers”

  1. Cheryl, Gulf Coast Poet Avatar

    An impassioned response to the horrors we see on TV every day. The war is indeed the “elephant in the room.” Trying to ignore it just increases the vague feeling of malaise we feel from seeing people losing their lives and homes. Both the Ukrainians and the Russian people are suffering needlessly. A powerful poem, Smitha!

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      True, Cheryl. The common man on both sides are suffering and in a world that we consider connected, we are able to do nothing but watch from the sidelines. ‘Power corrupts’ is unfortunately true. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on the issue, Cheryl. Discussing the issue ensures we have not reached a state of apathy. That would be a shame.

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  2. boundlessblessingsblog Avatar

    Excellent poem, Smitha. Every stanza was awesome.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you very much, Kamal. I couldn’t write anything until I had written this. I’m happy you liked the poem.

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      1. boundlessblessingsblog Avatar

        Welcome dear Smitha 💖😊

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  3. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    You did a great job, Smitha.

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  4. Dalo 2013 Avatar

    The past few weeks there seems to have been a flurry of activity around the world ~ where the mood is to get back to some semblance of life we’ve known in the peaceful past, but it is impossible. You describe this feeling I have in your curtal sonnet (thank you for teaching me about this). Beautifully written, and mostly you put a very visceral image with the lines: “…this time he’s tightened the noose around the land of sunflowers, and grain.
    He roams the streets, gulping ravenously, unrestrained.” It is this dark shadow on the world, of humankind, of any effort for progress to become a better place. Well done, Smitha, shining your light on this darkness. Take care ~

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you for making the time to read the poem and for your warm words, Randall. Your response is always such a delight to read (though the issue here is tragic). I’m pleased to know the poem resonated with your feelings on the current situation. Thank you again for the appreciation. It means a lot. You too, take care.

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  6. Sangbad Avatar

    Well done and every word echoing the present

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much, Sangbad for your kind appreciation.

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  7. Andrea Stephenson Avatar

    Powerfully written Smitha, this is part of the importance of poetry, to talk about difficult things in a way that makes people feel them.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you, Andrea for telling me its ok to talk about it. It keeps coming back to me no matter how hard I try to write something prettier. Now that I’ve written it, I’m going to write a pleasanter one. Do read it.

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  8. Vineetha Brijesh Avatar
    Vineetha Brijesh

    Well written Smitha.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thanks Vineetha!

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  9. VJ Avatar

    Seems to be no end to the greed. Well written V

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you, VJ for taking the time to read the poem and for your appreciation of it. I’m glad you liked it.

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      1. VJ Avatar

        My pleasure!

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