Quadrille : Baby’s breath

The prompt on the 30th of April by the facebook group TSL, was to write a poem using a line from a song you like. I chose to write it on a song that’s very special to me- ‘Edelweiss’ from the Sound of Music.

The truth is I’m no good at singing. But I would sing this song for my little one when she was a baby- after she’d been given a shower, powdered and swaddled and was ready to sleep. This was my go-to lullaby. I had a few others too, which I might just post. She listened to me with so much love, that after a while, I did believe I was quite the singer 🙂. I’m sharing this song today as it happens to be the not-so- little one’s 18th birthday today. We’re posponing the celebrations though until the 20th as it’s exam time.

Note: I’ve posted only two verses of my poem-song here as I’m participating in  Quadrille night! Sleepy times, the prompt from Sarah at dVerse ~ Poets Pub, which is to use a form of the word sleep in a 44-word poem (excluding title). There is no need for meter of rhyme in this form. It’s my first time taking part, so I’m hoping i got it right.

Baby’s breath

Baby’s breath, Baby’s breath
You look happy to greet me
Clean and bright, small and light
You look happy to meet me

Baby’s breath, may you bloom and grow
Bloom and grow, my darling
Sleep, sleep and dream away
You’ve got my heart forever

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P.S. Below is the original poem I had written

Baby’s breath

Baby’s breath, Baby’s breath
You look happy to greet me
Clean and bright, small and light
You look happy to meet me

Angel of God, may you bloom and grow
Bloom and grow, my darling
Edelweiss, Edelweiss
Bless my baby forever

Go to bed, go to bed
Dream away, my darling
Clean and bright, small and light
You’ve got my heart forever

Baby’s breath, Baby’s breath
Angel of God, may you bloom and grow,
Bloom and grow, forever

You can listen to the original song below and if any of you is a singer, would love to hear you sing my version of the song 🙂

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20 responses to “Quadrille : Baby’s breath”

  1. Bridgette Avatar
    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much,Bridgette. I’m so glad you enjoyed the poem.

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  2. Manja Maksimovič Avatar

    Hurrah! Happy 18 celebrations!! A beautiful poem to sing to your child.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      😍❤️😘…thanks Manja. It’s finally done🙂

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  3. Sonia Dogra Avatar

    Beautifully adapted Smitha. Love this song too. Listened to it after a long, long time.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thanks Sonia :). So glad I brought this song back to you. The movie is one of my favorites.

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  4. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    Fantastic, Smitha. I recognised that it was based on Edelweiss before I read your introduction. Great job!

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Ah really…that’s nice. Thank you so much, Robbie. Did I tell you how much you resembled Julie Andrews in your wedding dress?🙂

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  5. Vineetha Brijesh Avatar

    Beautiful and calming 🥰

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      I used to sing it to Akanksha 🙂

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  6. lynn__ Avatar

    I’ve always loved that song from”The Sound of Music” and I like how you adapted it to a baby’s lullaby 🙂

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thanks so much Lynn for visiting. It somehow fit perfectly as a lullaby and my little one loved it 🙂

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  7. Cheryl, Gulf Coast Poet Avatar

    Very creative adaptation and sweet birthday tribute! Lovely, Smitha! ❤

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you, dear Cheryl. Writing this poem made me realize how quickly time flies. I’m so glad to know you liked the poem. XXX

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  8. sarahsouthwest Avatar

    I love this! I remember altering words for my babies, too. And this is just adorable.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you very much, Sarah! I love that you loved the poem- your words made me smile a happy smile. X

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  9. harmonykentonline Avatar

    This s so sweet, Smitha! 💕🙂

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      🙂 thanks so much, Harmony. It was the simplest song for me to sing. XO

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  10. SelmaMartin Avatar

    I know that song. I love it toooo.
    Lovely. Thanks for the share. Xoxo.
    Lovely quadrille. xoxo

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      WOW! That’s nice to know- that you love it too :). Thank you, Selma, for appreciating my first attempt at a quadrille. It’s so good to be back here again. XOXO

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