NaPoWriMo 2018 : Day 6 – I Worry About You

Today, challenge is to write a poem that stretches your comfort zone with line breaks. That could be a poem with very long lines, or very short lines. Or a poem that blends the two. You might break to emphasize (or de-emphasize) sounds or rhymes, or to create a moment of hesitation in the middle of a thought. The craft resource for today, consists of Alberto Ríos’s thoughts on the poetic line.

Well, here’s mine for today…


I worry about you
"That isn't new!"
You're young.  Its a mistake. I wish you knew
I worry about you.

There was nothing more to say
My love, an obstacle, in her way
I watched her...hoped she'd understand some day.

"I worry about you"
The words ring
said not too long ago

Some twenty odd years or so...
"I worry about you," said with concern
I had replied then, vain or naive, unable to discern

"You'll understand one day,"
"Some day...
when I've gone away."
My mother had said tenderly.
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12 responses to “NaPoWriMo 2018 : Day 6 – I Worry About You”

  1. shalini Avatar

    So beautiful we written


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  3. Poetkatie Avatar

    I can relate to this x


    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thanks Katie. All of us mothers have been there at sometime. We’ve done it too to our moms. The cycle of life:)

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  4. Feelings and Freedom Avatar

    I simply loved this one Smitha. Such a poignant one. I’m sure every mother and every daughter can totally relate to it. Keep writing 👍🏻👍🏻


    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so, so much Vandana. One of those hard truths of life:). You understand when you get there :).


  5. thewritewomanblog Avatar

    Mother’s love and mother’s woes – it is a lifelong story, one that will remain till your last breath.


    1. Smitha V Avatar

      You don’t get it until you are in those shoes. Sad but true.

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  6. Kurian Avatar

    Good one Smitha. Lovely put mother’s love

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much Kurian. I guess its every mother and child’s story…repeats with each generation.

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      1. Kurian Avatar

        Very true Smitha. Thank you

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