NaPoWriMo 2018 : Day 6 – I Worry About You

Today, challenge is to write a poem that stretches your comfort zone with line breaks. That could be a poem with very long lines, or very short lines. Or a poem that blends the two. You might break to emphasize (or de-emphasize) sounds or rhymes, or to create a moment of hesitation in the middle of a thought. The craft resource for today, consists of Alberto Ríos’s thoughts on the poetic line.

Well, here’s mine for today…

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I worry about you
"That isn't new!"
You're young.  Its a mistake. I wish you knew
I worry about you.

"Don't!"
There was nothing more to say
My love, an obstacle, in her way
I watched her...hoped she'd understand some day.


"I worry about you"
The words ring
Haunting;
said not too long ago

Some twenty odd years or so...
"I worry about you," said with concern
Stop!
I had replied then, vain or naive, unable to discern

"You'll understand one day,"
"Some day...
when I've gone away."
My mother had said tenderly.
P.C. From the Net

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12 responses to “NaPoWriMo 2018 : Day 6 – I Worry About You”

  1. shalini Avatar

    So beautiful we written

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  3. Poetkatie Avatar

    I can relate to this x

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thanks Katie. All of us mothers have been there at sometime. We’ve done it too to our moms. The cycle of life:)

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  4. Feelings and Freedom Avatar

    I simply loved this one Smitha. Such a poignant one. I’m sure every mother and every daughter can totally relate to it. Keep writing 👍🏻👍🏻

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so, so much Vandana. One of those hard truths of life:). You understand when you get there :).

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  5. thewritewomanblog Avatar

    Mother’s love and mother’s woes – it is a lifelong story, one that will remain till your last breath.

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      You don’t get it until you are in those shoes. Sad but true.

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  6. Kurian Avatar

    Good one Smitha. Lovely put mother’s love

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    1. Smitha V Avatar

      Thank you so much Kurian. I guess its every mother and child’s story…repeats with each generation.

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      1. Kurian Avatar

        Very true Smitha. Thank you

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